What is a treasured possession? It could be everything that comes in your mind: a pencil, a piece of paper, a little teddy bear… everything could be a desired and treasured object and one of the most important aspects that makes people consider any object a treasured possession is the sentimental value it has.
But there are other ones that make you feel really fine. Most people enjoy them. What am I talking about? I am talking about a thin and circle pieces that have a hard square cover. If you watch them, they could look like a donut, but they are not edible. They have a very special content, and sometimes they may not words, but they express a lot of ideas and feelings, some other times they make us dance; that would be the music, precisely the CDs
They can be old fashioned for some people because there are some other technologies that are improving the music market. In spite of this, there are some other people, like me, that considered the great value that a CD can have for anyone.
For me, my most treasured possessions are my Radiohead’s discs, most of them I have in a special edition or are imported from some other countries. It goes without saying that Radiohead is one of my favorite bands that is why I really considered it to be a big treasure for me.
Another of the most interesting things about music or CDs is that we can find them anywhere. There are some places that are really specialized in one kind of music; some others sell all kinds of music. But not only in the stores, we could go to a party and we are almost sure that there will be music and might be people dancing.
The music or CDs have another special aspect that makes us know more about some other places that we have never visited. They also can be useful for a school practice. So, music makes a person relax, feel, dance, is amazing.
I think I get 17.
Hey Daniela.
ResponderEliminarI think you, generaly, did a good job. Despite some errors the main idea is understandable, but the detail are a bit fuzzy.
Hi Daniela!
ResponderEliminarI think you did a good job and although our topic was the same the content is very different. I only got reading trubles with some mechanic items.
Hi Daniela!
ResponderEliminargood work. I just think you can do a better physical description of the CD and maybe you can finish one idea and then start another one.
Hi Daniela: I think you did a good job, but I think there's missing a more detail explanation about why you like Cds, maybe the feelings you have when you listen to radiohead's songs and the reasons for treasured their CDs.
ResponderEliminarHi Daniela. Good job. I found some spelling mistakes and also, I think the two first paragraphs are too long and actually are not related with the CDs, maybe you can add some information in these paragraphs to introduce your interest for CDs.
ResponderEliminarHi daniela!!!
ResponderEliminarIt depends on what you believe "old" is no? haha I like your opinion and also radiohead!!, you did a good job, may be detail more why you preffered CD's instead of new technologies, but I think your text is good!!
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Hi Daniela.
ResponderEliminarI think you did a good job, it's nice to know that your most treasured possessions are the Radiohead’s discs. Did you go to the concert? well that is another topic.
Hey Daniela, you made a good descrition of the CD's and when you continue reading you can tell that you love radiohead (hehehe) I think you made a good job
ResponderEliminarHello Dany!!!
ResponderEliminarI like your work becuase you describe very well what is a treasured object to you and you gave us an example, maybe you can talk more about why your CDs are so important for you, more personal details. Your composition is well structured and the language use is also good.
Hi Daniela: I like, you describe fine your treasured object, in general I like the way you organize your composition, so good work.
ResponderEliminarHello Daniela.
ResponderEliminarI enjoyed your composition, your CD's descrption is so creative. Your ideas are organized. Maybe you could give details about why CD's and not other technologies. Nice composition
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ResponderEliminarI really like Radiohead but no cd's hahaha, seriously, I find your compostion well structured, but I must ask you why dont you like gadgets? or why do you prefer cd's rather than gadgets? I think you can develop more these ideas...
Hi Daniela,
ResponderEliminarI like the way you developed the ideas. I think it was very interesting when you emphasized the value CDs have for some people, and also the music. I think you accomplish the goal of the task by describing the valued objects, and then your special ones. I think you did a very good job.
Hi Dany:
ResponderEliminarI it was a good story, it was also clear and you focused on what you consider your treasure wich is very important.
Good job!!!
Robert
Hey Daniela:
ResponderEliminarI like the way you started, it was strong, but in the middle I thik you lost strength.
In general it was well structured, aslo I like it because I share your opinion about CDs, is a shame they´re about to disappear, besides I´m a big fan of Radiohead.
Hey Daniela, I think you did a nice work, explaining your ideas in a good way, but I think in some parts you were more formal than in others. I share with you the importance of the CD but most of all, as you said, the real value of the music.
ResponderEliminarHello.
ResponderEliminarI think that you did it well, I didn't find major mistakes, and it was very interesting the part when you try that the reader could guess what are you talking about, is a good literary resort. You respected your main idea, and didn't contradicted yourself.
There are some parts where your text sounds like Spanish, for example, in the part where says: " For me, my most treasured possessions are my Radiohead’s discs...", you could have ommited "For me".
That´s all.
Gabriel García
Hi Daniela!
ResponderEliminarI think you made a good job, it's nice to know that you cherish yourRadiohead’s CD's. You described well the CD and left us with a nice image of your treasures.
Bere
Hi Daniela
ResponderEliminarI liked the way you express your ideas. I think it´s clear. You have a good organization and linked the ideas in the right way. You should check your use of English and the verb tenses according to the situation. Good job.